问答网 问答 小学 作文 跪求老师帮忙改雅思作文,改改我的语法,结构,还能帮我看看我应该能得几分吗?somepeoplebelievethatthereshouldbefixedpunishmentsforeachtypeofcrime.others,however,arguethatthecircumstancesofanindividualcrim
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跪求老师帮忙改雅思作文,改改我的语法,结构,还能帮我看看我应该能得几分吗?somepeoplebelievethatthereshouldbefixedpunishmentsforeachtypeofcrime.others,however,arguethatthecircumstancesofanindividualcrim
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跪求老师帮忙改雅思作文,改改我的语法,结构,还能帮我看看我应该能得几分吗?

somepeoplebelievethatthereshouldbefixedpunishmentsforeachtypeofcrime.others,however,arguethatthecircumstancesofanindividualcrime,andthemotivationforcommittingit,shouldalwaysbetakenintoaccountwhendecidingonthepuishment.Disscussbothandgiveownopinion.

Whilethenewcriminalactthathasestablished,therearesomeindividualsconsiderthepunishmentsshouldbevariousforeachcrimineaccordingtotherealsituations.Butotherpublicthinkoppositely,theypreferthepenaltiesmustbesameforeveryone.

Ononehand,thecourtshouldalwaysmakejudgementsaccordingtothecrimine’smotivation,whichwouldshowsthekindnessandhumanityofthecourtandjury.Forexample,amanistoohungrytoliveandhestolesomefoodinordertosurvive,hismotivationisnotharmfultothesocirtyandheisnotonpurpose.Therefore,thiscanbeconsiderasasmallcaseandonlygivelightpunishmentwouldbemorefairtotheman.Incontrast,ifthereisanothermanwhoisreallyrichandjuststealfoodasahabit,hemightneedmorelessonesratherthanjustusethefixedpunishmentstoteachhim.

Ontheotherhand,samepunishmentsfromthefixedlawwouldbemucheasierforthecourttomakejudgements,alsotheyhaveclearlyevidencestoapprovetheirdecisions.Inaddition,itpresentsjusticeandequitytothepublicbyobeythelaw.

Inmyopinion,punishmentsshouldconsiderdifferentcaseswillbemoreappropriateinthemodernsociety.Everyonewouldmeetsomedifficultiesduringlifetime.Thereforepunishmentsandlawcouldbemorehumanitywhilepeoplearenotdeliberatelytobreakthelaw.

Inconclusion,bothopinionscouldworkinthecourt,butitisbettertoimplementdependsonthereality.

丁浩杰回答:
  somepeoplebelievethatthereshouldbefixedpunishmentsforeachtypeofcrime.(注意大小写)Others,however,arguethatthecircumstancesofanindividualcrime,andthemotivationforcommittingit,shouldalwaysbetakenintoaccountwhendecidingonthepuishment.Disscussbothandgivejustifiedopinion.(改了一个词,原先意思不明确)   Whilethenewcriminalactthathasestablished,therearesomeindividualsconsidering(用ing语法错误)thepunishmentsshouldbevarified(动词会好一点)foreachcrimineaccordingtotherealsituations.Butotherpublicthinkoppositely,theypreferthepenaltiesmustbeequal(平等)foreveryone.   先改到这哈,我先有事,回头给你再看看   Ononehand,thecourtshouldalwaysmakejudgementsaccordingtothecrimine’smotivation,whichwouldshowsthekindnessandhumanityofthecourtandjury.Forexample,amanistoohungrytoliveandhestolesomefoodinordertosurvive,hismotivationisnotharmfultothesocirtyandheisnotonpurpose.Therefore,thiscanbeconsiderasasmallcaseandonlygivelightpunishmentwouldbemorefairtotheman.Incontrast,ifthereisanothermanwhoisreallyrichandjuststealfoodasahabit,hemightneedmorelessonesratherthanjustusethefixedpunishmentstoteachhim.   Ontheotherhand,samepunishmentsfromthefixedlawwouldbemucheasierforthecourttomakejudgements,alsotheyhaveclearlyevidencestoapprovetheirdecisions.Inaddition,itpresentsjusticeandequitytothepublicbyobeythelaw.   Inmyopinion,punishmentsshouldconsiderdifferentcaseswillbemoreappropriateinthemodernsociety.Everyonewouldmeetsomedifficultiesduringlifetime.Thereforepunishmentsandlawcouldbemorehumanitywhilepeoplearenotdeliberatelytobreakthelaw.   Inconclusion,bothopinionscouldworkinthecourt,butitisbettertoimplementdependsonthereality.我来帮他解答   输入内容已经达到长度限制   还能输入9999字   插入图片删除图片插入地图删除地图插入视频视频地图
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