请英语高手帮我点评我的这篇英语四级作文,

1：许多人喜欢在除夕夜看春节晚会

2：但有些人提出取消春节晚会

3：我的看法

WhenaskedaboutspringfestivalgalaonCCTV,differentpeoplewillofferdifferentopinions.Somepeoplethinkthattheprogramsinspringfestivalgalaareverywonderfulandtheyliketowatch.Inaddition,italreadybecomeaexpectationwhencelebratingspringfestival.

However,therearestillmanypeoplewhodonotagree.Theyholdthatweshouldcanceltheconductofspringfestivalgalabecauseweholdalarge-scaleeveningpartywillspendmuchmoneyandconsumealargenumberofmanpower.Buttherearestillmanypoorpeopleinourcountryandtheyalsohaven'tfoodormoneytocelebratethefestival.

Personally,Iamonthesideoftheformerargument.Foronething,astous,springfestivalisthemostimportantfestival,itmeansthattheoldyearpassedandthenewyearwillcome,soweshouldholdsomewonderfulgalatocelebrateandtowelcomethenewyear.Foranother,therearemanyChineselivingabroad.Andifweholdagalacanmakethemhappyinspringfestivalandcanspreadourculturetoforeigners.