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RecreationalActivities
Nowadays,differentkindsofrecreationalactivitiesaroundourlife.Forexample,watchingTV,singing,dancing,playingchess,traveling,surfingontheInternetandsoon.
Therearemanyrecreationalactivitiesinourlifeanditcanmakeussohappy.Peoplewhoalwaysinworkcantakepartinrecreationalactivitiestorelaxtheirselfandpeoplewhostayathomeallalongcantakepartinittoenrichtheirlife.Buteverycoinhastwosides,recreationalactivitiesisnoexceptionandinanotherword,itstillhasnegativeaspects.Tobeginwith,thestudentswhotakepartinmanyrecreationalactivitiesmayeffecttheirstudy.Andinaddition,manypeoplecan'tlimitthetimesinplayanditwillreducethetimesofrest.
Formypart,weshouldn'twork、studyorstayathomealltheway,wemusttakepartinrecreationalactivitiestomakeourbodyrelax,forexample,wecaninviteourfriendstotravelonweekend,Ithinkitisveryinteresting.Buteverythingshouldn'tdoexcessively,wemuststudytolimittheplaytimes.Inaword,weshouldadmittheadvantagesofrecreationalactivitiesandalsoacceptthedisadvantages.